In all honesty though, it’s a nice essay. I have to remind myself you are in high school; I’m trying to look at it like it’s a college essay!
But all that aside, I hope you haven’t submitted it to your teacher yet, at least, if you haven’t corrected the “September 11, 2011” to “September 11, 2011”!
All that aside, RobertAslin_FPST1213_Fall2015.docx - Google Docs here’s an essay I wrote last semester during Fire Prevention Week about the Beverly Hills Supper Club fire. This is another reminder why we need fire sprinklers and detection/alarm systems in buildings.